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1. "Needly are of shine," "adding long glassy highlights," and " Towering volumes of marble and glass."
http://star-bellysneetch.blogspot.com/   (#5)

2. As the passage goes on, the author uses phrases like "He's got a lot of dough" and "they're also touchy as hell" to make it feel as though the narrator is just another regular kid who is telling you a story.
http://jimmehftw.blogspot.com/  (#6)

3.the matter of fact way Baker describes the lobby makes the reader sense that this is somewhere to not be impressed with, its an everyday occurrence.
http://skullandglossbones3.blogspot.com/   (#4)

4.In the excerpt from The Mezzanine  by Nicholson Baker, he writes with an elevated refinement that is both dignified and straight-forward.
 http://morgan-happygolucky.blogspot.com/  (#1)


Best:

The colloquial, coarse, and somewhat unmannerly diction in "Catcher in the Rye" exemplifies the narrator's down-to-earth, pissed off at the world personality. His defiant and thick skinned nature jumps out when he explains that all the background information about his life is just "David Copperfield kind of crap" that bores him. As the passage goes on, the author uses phrases like "He's got a lot of dough" and "they're also touchy as hell" to make it feel as though the narrator is just another regular kid who is telling you a story. The terse and all together informal nature of the narrator echoes through the entire passage in this excerpt from "Catcher in the Rye."
 http://jimmehftw.blogspot.com/